Assignment: Let’s keep carving away at our dialogue and tweaking it.
Today, write the dialogue between the two men in the picture below. Be
creative! Then post it in the Facebook Group.
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| photo licensed under creative commons, courtesy of bradleygee |
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Huddled deep in his orange jacket, Roy moved as quickly
as possible. “This would be so much
easier if I could walk along the boardwalk” he mumbled under his breath. As a private investigator, Roy often
sacrificed his personal comfort. He’d
done numerous tracking and tailing of suspects before. This time was no different. But the slippery grass from the melting snow
was physically draining.
Keeping his prescription sunglasses on the target ahead,
Roy kept moving. His name was Albert and
his suspected crime was chronic cheating.
Not only did this guy fail at monogamous relationship, but he also cut
corners on the job and cheated on his taxes.
He always looked for flaws in products or switched price tags in stores
in order to pay less. Yes, this guy was
at least going to provide Roy with some entertainment.
Suddenly Albert stopped.
He had been strolling along the boardwalk, destination unknown. Roy paused, pulling out a guide book as part
of his cover. He appeared to be a lost
wanderer, exploring the area. He kept a
casual glance at Albert. In the corner
of his eye, he noticed a blur of black approaching him. If he ran, it would alert Albert. If he stayed, maybe Albert would just bypass
him? Good thing Roy was the praying
type. “Lord, help!” he pleaded silently.
“Uh, pardon me, sir?” Albert asked hesitatingly, “do you
have the time?”
The time?! Roy
thought. This is something different.
“Yes, it’s 4:30 pm” Roy announced.
Albert looked quite uncertain.
“Is everything alright? You look
a bit puzzled” Roy took a wild guess, hoping that he didn’t give anything away.
“Um, well, I had to make a drop off across town by 4:00
pm. It’s too late for me now.” Albert
was starting to sound distressed. “And I
had to meet my girl, Candy, by 5:00 pm.”
He was starting to speak faster, starting to sound like one long run on
sentence. “Then I have another meeting
at 7:30 pm, with a friend, a dinner date.
There’s no way I can make it there now.
No way! I’m doomed!” He finally stopped and took a deep breath.
Yep, definitely a
cheater, Roy realized. If only all my cases were so easy. “Well, dude, that’s too bad. Maybe you should do the drop-off—it sounds
important. Then go and see your, um,
girl. You know the ladies,” Roy forced a
chuckle, “they’re always running late themselves. Who knows, once you explain yourself, perhaps
your later meeting can be delayed? I
have a hunch about that one…” He let his
voice trail off. Better to quit now,
before he revealed too much. While it
was a thrill to bust these guys, Roy didn’t want to rob Albert’s
soon-to-be-ex-girlfriend of this pleasure.
Roy watched Albert walk away with a renewed pep in his
step. The sucker has no clue of what’s coming he thought to himself. After a few moments, Roy pulled out his cell
phone. He dialed a number, intending to
close this case in a next few minutes.
“Hello, Gretchen? Roy here. I have an update for you…” He felt no shame
in letting the smile shine through over the phone.
